This piece of writing was designed to be a motivational speech aimed to encourage pupils to face challenges and reach their goals. The class have been looking at features of motivational speaking as part of a project linked with our local Children's University.
The writer is 10 years old and is at the beginning of year 6. I have been impressed with his progress this term and feel his potential is some way beyond the level 3b he achieved in year 5.
I am going to use the Criterion Scale ( used on this blog with kind permission from Ros Wilson) to try to find a level and hopefully highlight ways forward and next steps. I haven't done this yet ( before posting) because I want to do it as the first comment on the blog and then seen what other people have to contribute.
All comments are welcome and appreciated. This isn't something I have always found easy, particularly in moderation activities but using this blog has given me a lot of help.
I think sometimes in moderation activites the most vocal members of the group can sway opinion (unintentionally) so perhaps valuable contributions to this blog could lead to a more accurate and considered moderation experience.
I do hope readers of this are able to add comments in terms of providing an accurate levelled assessment of the writing
( it doesn't need to be with the Criterion Scale), and offer suggestions to take the writer forward.
Thanks for visiting this site and for ( hopefully!) joining in.
|NP denotes new paragraph- added by the writer|
|NP in middle added by writer. NP at top of page by teacher ( writer said it was obvious)|
|Criterion Scale Level 3|
|Criterion Scale Level 4|